Le Voyage de Beatrice

Well I LOVE that you are letting them lead you because what you are writing is brilliant. I loved this chapter, it was beautiful and to me really displayed how you really understand the characters, what they are feeling, how they are changing... It's almost like your novel is a second chance for a lot of these characters, like you're giving them another turn with things and seeing what they do with it. Giving them room to breath and make choices... and Lily's character is a nice addition to the potter universe, she really is like the glue that holds the key players of this story together. Her being there for Harry and Snape to turn to is fantastically good. Both Snape and Harry tend to try to deal with things on their own, but Lily won't hear of it, she wants to be there for them. I also loved how you had Harry break down. He was allowed the chance to do that because his mother was there. And now with Lily being a sort of voice of reason for Albus... I think that is also fantastic. This chapter really was like Albus being forced to look in a mirror, which was why it was so painful. Anways I love how this story is unfolding and I too am very happy that there is much more of it to come. :)